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                I never took my eyes off him, watching him closely for any hint of what he was planning to do next. But I never got a chance to find out what that would be because a foggy haze tugged at the rims of my vision, clouding it over and sending me deep into unconsciousness.

 

                All was black around me, but for a small light that shone in front of me. The light came closer, drawing nearer till it was so close it was almost blinding.

                “Who are you?” asked a voice.

                “I don’t know anymore,” I answered.

                The voice was quiet for a moment. Then the light dimmed till I could see the being that had spoken. It was a woman. She had long dark hair and purple-grey eyes. She wore a long dark purple cloak that seemed to flow down her perfect figure and came to puddle around her feet on the floor. Beautiful white wings that seemed like something that you would find in a fairytale, protruded from her back, floating on air, it seemed. Something about her made her give off a comforting aura that made you feel like you could trust her one hundred percent, like you could tell her anything and everything, your deepest darkest secrets. But I knew better than that. I could trust no one but myself. I couldn’t even fully trust my friends. Especially my used-to-be best friend, seeing as she had tried to kidnap me and her supposed boyfriend had threatened to kill me, and then decided to save me. I seemed to be caught up in some sick, twisted dream. I just wanted it to end so I could wake up and go back to living my normal life with my normal parents and normal sister. But I knew that that would never and could never happen.

                Neither of us spoke for a while. I thought about her answer for a while, then thought of another question to ask.

                “What are you?” I asked her.

                But before she could answer, her form started to waver and she slowly faded away into nothingness. Even the light was gone. I stood up, surrounded by darkness once more, though it didn’t last long. Soon, another figure appeared, this time clad all in black as he walked toward me. He, too, had wings; black ones that seemed to reach to the heavens. They came to a point at the top and wove a pattern of darkness till they reached the bottom. But just as he was about to reach me, his form started to waver slightly. One hand reached out, extended toward me. But his form wavered more, and he started to disappear. I couldn’t tear my eyes away from the dark figure that now loomed over me.

                “Trust no one but yourself. Don’t meet the same fate that befell your family,” it said, in a choked, raspy voice. Then he faded away until I was left alone, surrounded by the darkness once more.

 

                I gasped, and then recoiled, for the sharp intake of cold air shocked my body, giving me a head ache. I couldn’t remember anything as I gazed around the clearing again, seeing nothing but blurs of green, blue, and brown. I tried to sit up, but my head spun, forcing me to lie back down.

 


this is the revised edition of part of the story. i got stuck and desided to rewrite part of it. if you have any ideas for what should come next, let me know. thanks!

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awsome!

2008-07-08 10:55:30


WOW AMAZING

2008-06-18 17:05:34


thanks. im still writing more for this edition of it and will be posting more soon. keep checking for more! hopefully this one will turn out better than the last. -Dawn

2008-05-13 18:37:08


Wow, its good!

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