ART + LIFE
Horizon 1 (NEW!)
HORIZON {天涯}
Verse #1: “Stars”
Volume #1
By: Komugi-San {Christopher Wheat}
Characters:
Kan Miko
Neighbor Woman
Enzeru
Nero
Cleric 1&2
Page 1
Panel 1
Show a volcano and a quiet sky.
Panel 2
Show a small eruption.
Panel 3
A giant serpent shoots out of the volcano.
Serpent – “Raaaaaah!”
Page 2
Panel 1
The giant serpent with a variety of disfiguration is wrapped around most of the volcano.
Serpent – “At last! I’m free from that accursed pit! Creator, you’re going to be sorry you locked me…Nero, away that the hole. Now you can watch as I devastate your land in complete darkness.”
Panel 2
Show the second snake emerging from a different volcano.
Nero – “Even now, my brother Grod is ready to destroy your splendor to the north.”
Page 3
Panel 1
The snake looks around.
Nero – “Where to begin.”
Panel 2
Nero spots the city of Azor, but the city is not as big as it will be later in the story.
Nero – “Yes, the measly city of Azor; that will do.”
Panel 3
Show a set of eyes (frog-like).
Nero – “My faithful servant, stay here to guard the entrance.”
Page 4
Panel 1
The snake starts to head off. Two clerics are watching the snake hidden in the forest.
Cleric 1 – “Is it-“
Cleric 2 – “Shh.” “It’ll hear you.”
Panel 2
The snake disappears and the clerics are speaking.
Cleric 2 – “Just as I feared, the beast from the pit has broken through.”
Cleric 1 – “What are we going to do?”
Cleric 2 – “We’ll need to send word out to the other clerics that we all are in serious danger.”
Cleric 1 – “We’re doomed.”
Cleric 1 – “We’re doomed.”
Panel 3
Close-up of the cleric 2.
Cleric 2 – “No. It is written that someone will be chosen to come and open that which the Lord has promised.”
Page 5
Panel 1
Info. Box: Several years later.
{Note: The buildings and environment are similar to that of Jerusalem around 10 to 50 A.D.}
Show a village along a horizon line with a few doves flying about. The sun is setting.
Info. Box: “This is village of Pella, my home. It’s just one of the many towns underneath the rotting decay of the Azor Domain.”
Panel 2
The sun has set and the stars start to come out in the night sky. Some lights can be seen in open windows.
Info. Box: “Though we have the security from the Domain sentries against invaders to the north, my people still nervous about our Sovereign leader. Why not, my people have every right to be because they are all truly slaves to the system with no freedoms and country of their own.”
Page 6
Panel 1
A teen girl, who has her typical hood on her head, pops her head up in the window and looks suspiciously around.
Info. Box: “This is me. Kan Miko, and I can tell you right now; I am nobody’s slave!” “I have lost a lot of close friends that have been dear to me, but I swear to God, I will get my friends back! And maybe, these people in my town will stop avoiding me!”
Panel 2
She then pops her head out the door way and looks again.
Info. Box: “You see the people in town have always looked at me strangely because I didn’t look just like them. Mom just told me to forget about it, but I can’t. Every time I turn around it seems like people just want to stare.”
Panel 3
She steps out of the doorway, with her robes and looks around.
Info. Box: “My mom and my friends have always told me that I have a bad temper.” “I think they’re full of it!”
Panel 4
The girl dashes off.
Info. Box: “My temper is what has made me strong!” “That is what keeps these people off my back!”
Page 7
Panel 1
The girl is running down the dirt road.
Info. Box: “I really miss my friends, though. I wish these Domain people would just leave.”
Panel 2
She runs by a neighbor woman who is hanging clothes.
Woman – “Where are you going in such a hurry Miko?”
Panel 3
Suddenly Miko comes to a complete stop in irritation because of her discovery.
Miko – “Grrrrrrr.”
Panel 4
Miko quickly smiles with an innocent look.
Miko – “I’m running an errand for my mom.”
Woman – “Be…”
Panel 5
Miko suddenly dashes off.
Woman – “…careful!”
Mko – “Okay – bye!”
Page 8
Panel 1
Miko is still running.
Miko – “She’s such a fool; she’s like the rest of the townspeople.” “Why should I listen to her, I barely listen to my own mother.”
Panel 2
Miko stops with a big grin on her face.
Panel 3
Miko stretches out her arms as a breeze blows in her face.
Page 9
Panel 1
Miko stands on the edge of a large valley. There are few trees, several bushes and lambs around.
Info. Box: “The valley of Pella. It really is a beautiful place.”
Page 10
Panel 1
Miko starts to run down the hill with her arms fanned out like a bird.
Miko – “It almost feels like I’m flying.” “I love it out here.”
Panel 2
As she runs past several lambs trying to avoid her as she goes down.
Panel 3
Suddenly Miko runs into the side of another lamb that was eating.
Miko – “Oaff!”
Page 11
Panel 1
Miko gets up quickly in rage. Her eyes start glowing in anger.
Miko – “Grrrrrr!”
Panel 2
She grabs the sheep.
Miko – “Stupid sheep!”
Panel 3
Miko raise it in the air in anger, the lamb is suddenly scared.
Panel 4
Miko pauses for a moment about her actions.
Panel 5
Miko puts the sheep down.
Miko (self) – “What’s wrong with me?”
Panel 6
Miko watches the lamb running off in terror.
Miko – “Get lost!”
Page 12
Panel 1
From a distance, we see the back of four heads that are shaped like wolves, but the lower half of their body is that of a raptor. They are called Blightens. They are watching Miko walk away.
Panel 2
The heads start to move.
Panel 3
Miko heads toward one of the few trees with several high bushes around.
Miko – “Here’s the spot.”
Panel 4
Miko then gets down on her knees and starts to pray.
Page 13
Panel 1
Miko is praying. Wolves are seen in the distance.
Miko – “Dear God, please hear my prayer because my people and I need your help. You know I’ve been faithfully coming to you every night and right now…I’m angry. I have lost most of my friends to moving or slavery. I don’t know how much longer I can take this, with the Domain. I feel like I want to kill them all! God, help my mom, her store isn’t doing so well and lately weird people have been watching her. Please protect her, me and my people; I want to help, to be a hero, but I don’t know what to do…Amen.”
Page 14
Panel 1
Miko tightens her fist.
Panel 2
Suddenly there’s a bright white flash from behind the tree and bushes. Miko screams.
Panel 3
A white dove flies out from the tree and some of the lambs scatter. Miko stands up.
Miko – “What?”
Page 15
Panel 1
We see two glowing light blue eyes coming from the bushes. A dark form can be seen.
Miko – “Blue eyes?”
Panel 2
Suddenly the form goes leaping out of the bushes. Miko screams again.
Page 16
Panel 1
The animal lands. Show feet only.
Panel 2 through 4
Each panel will cut a section of the tiger.
Page 17 & Page 18
Panel 1
There stands Enzeru, a gigantic white tiger with outer bones armor which towers over the tiny Miko. Enzeru is roaring. Miko looks terrified.
Page 19
Panel 1
Miko starts to back up in terror.
Miko – “Nice kitty.” “Stay…stay.”
Panel 2
Miko whips around and starts to run for her life.
Enzeru – (mental message) “Wait Miko!”
Panel 3
The blightens suddenly perk up their ears because Miko is running right at them as she has her head turned towards the tiger.
Panel 4
Miko is getting closer to the blightens as their mouths hang open.
Enzeru – (mental message) “Watch out!”
Page 20
Panel 1
Suddenly the huge tiger leaps from his spot.
Panel 2
Miko looks up as the tiger flies over her head.
Panel 3
The tiger lands right in between Miko and the blightens. Tiger is facing the blightens.
Page 21
Panel 1
Enzeru faces off with the four blightens.
Enzeru – (mental message) “Run Miko, I will hold them off.”
Panel 2
Miko is stunned by the tiger’s message.
Miko – “Did…you say…something?”
Panel 3
The tiger looks back at Miko.
Enzeru – (mental message) “Yes, Miko! RUN!”
Panel 4
As Miko makes a run for it, Enzeru rears up for an attack.
Page 22
Panel 1
Two blightens jump half way up Enzeru.
Panel 2
Enzeru swats one of the blightens on the ground. The other blighten falls off the tiger.
Panel 3
Another blighten jumps back on Enzeru.
Page 23
Panel 1
The blighten that was swatted to the side raises his head up and spots Miko running.
Panel 2
Miko is running. She is looking back to see a blighten coming after her and the other three blightens attacking Enzeru.
Panel 3
Miko turns to take on the blighten with her eyes glowing.
Panel 3
Enzeru sees the blighten closing in on Miko who is ready for battle.
Enzeru – (self) “No.”
Panel 4
Enzeru suddenly shakes hard with the bone which cuts them and he throws the three blightens off of him.
Panel 5
Enzeru roars.
Page 24
Panel 1
The blighten is getting closer to Miko. Miko raises her arms for a defense.
Panel 2
Enzeru leaps in the air.
Panel 3
The blighten bears down on Miko who is ready to hit the blighten.
Panel 4
The blighten is very close.
Panel 5
Miko swings her fist.
Page 25
Panel 1
Enzeru suddenly lands right on top of the blighten. Miko is thrown backward from the impact.
Page 26
Panel 1
Enzeru whips his head around.
Panel 2
Enzeru sees the other three blightens running off in fear.
Panel 3
Enzeru turns back at a shocked Miko who is still on the ground.
Enzeru – (mental message) “Do not worry. They will not bother you any more.”
Panel 4
Miko stands up.
Miko – “I - I don’t understand. How are you talking to me?”
Panel 5
Enzeru smiles with his mouth open like a laugh.
Page 27
Panel 1
Enzeru is looking down as Miko is looking up.
Enzeru – (mental message) “I am communicating to you through my mind. I am called ENZERU. I was sent here by God to be your protector and friend. You truly are an extra special person with abilities that most people do not have, so I have come with an important message…you have been chosen to unlock a very special gate that would rid the land of the giant serpents. You need to find…Horizon.”
Miko – “You have got to be kidding.”
End of Verse 1
Copyright © 2007
This is the rewrite of the original story. I think it flows more smoothly. Enzeru is a Tiger and the wolves are now Blightens
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