The
Bullet
my winning story
There I lay, the gun shot still ringing in my ear. All sense of time is distorted as the seconds lengthen, the very earth stopped to a crawl to watch this unholy act. The bullet slows in my eyes.
Why did I bring her here?
My love standing loose, suspended by the grip of the Reaper after suffering the torment of hands and blows as if a storm of rocks. She moves in slow motion to witness the deadly event.
Why did she say yes?
Seconds seemed more of hours as the bullet draws closer to its target. The wind tauntingly surrounds it, as if laughing at my stupidity. It begins to enter her left breast, the one holding her heart, penetrating its beautiful curves.
How could I have been so stupid?
The blood trails out like the ribbon of a spear driven in. Her face glistening in the moonlight, mouth open to breath her dieing breath. Terror. Pain. Sadness, all reflecting in her eyes.
Would she have said yes if she knew?
The blood falls, coloring every thing red in it’s greediness. It’s hands falls on my eye, for not for my own blood would it have more to taint.
Why do I care so much?
In that moment, as tear mates with blood, a red hue is thrown over my eyes. The stars grew closer as the very sky dropped. Five stars grow brighter, purer, than the rest.
Why am I alive?
I hear the song you sung when we first meet. The forest, the sky, the ground, and the moon joined the melody as the angels floated down to carry their sister away to that paradise of clouds.
When will the smoke clear to show who really pulled the trigger?
these is my story!!!!im very proud of it, seems how its the first one of its kind ive wrote!!!!! so please dont steal it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ur really good
UVIE
2008-04-06 19:12:53
its awesome*pop*
PUNKME1212
2008-03-03 15:49:53
i want more make a series plz !?!?!?!
ZEROKIRYU
2008-02-12 18:48:35
Brilliant. Deep, well written, good -NO- GREAT ideas and thoughts in this. It hits at a deep emotional level for something so short of a story.
SHIRASDAUGHTER
2008-02-09 19:42:30
Wow!! thats deep!! i loved it!! ^.^
ANIMEGURL911
2008-01-20 23:49:02
that was good
SABRINASPELLMEN
2008-01-08 10:48:32
that was deep. (why dosen't any of my stuff come out like this?) Good. I like it.
KITTEN4LYFE
2007-12-28 23:27:01
That was gorgeous, you can interpret it in so many ways, you made me think. Awesome job! *pop*
INUYASHAOBSESSED93
2007-11-24 12:21:30
Very, very 1000 very good^^
LOLAGIRL
2007-11-19 23:31:39
i like this story^^
RIKUSUKA
2007-09-29 19:55:01
O_O im blown away that was the best thing i ever read great job! ^^
0LOVELESS0BELOVED0
2007-08-17 23:55:36
i half expected for this to be some sort of terrible blahness... (i don't really know why...) but this is actually very good. not my taste, but still very well written. kudos to ye.
GRINZOR
2007-08-07 21:27:47
oh i loved it!
THELASTWOLFGIRL
2007-08-02 17:42:41
kool
RDGZ
2007-08-02 17:27:40
more more!!! ^_^ ^_^
ANIMEFREAK1
2007-08-02 16:55:44