Love your title and the way you want the title to flow like music. The only advice I have is for you to work on your perspective. Just lightly pencil in some lines that give you an "anchoring point" for you character line-up, so that they don't look like they are floating in space. I really like the careful thought you have given to the differences in your characters: different sexes, different stances, different heights, facial expressions, body expressions, all suggest a group ready for action. Have decided on a basic background for your basic group shot?

ATHENAPKS

2008-05-18 17:16:42

thanks for the advice man your a good artist yourself maybe when im thrity ill have something published too

ZEROWORLD

2008-05-08 03:04:33

Check proportions! On top of what lafleurdhiver mentioned, I think the 2nd person from the right can use a little more forearm, meaning the pants go lower, and the body longer. The head in the center is ambigious. It appears to be bigger than the 4th person, yet all its details are behind that figure. You might want to vary line work thickness a bit. I think you try creating volume by emphasizing the roundness of shapes, from hair to jacket folds, and adding some thicker line works will help it from being too repetitive. To create dimension with color, you might add a darker blue on the (2nd person from the right) jacket to tone the blue down. It is fighting with red right now. Same idea could apply to the rest by adding highlight or darkening the colors. And if the letterings need to stand out, either thicker black outlines, or change the color scheme away from majority of red and blue.

LOONY

2008-05-07 08:54:06